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Dear Figueroa, Picture, if you can, a classroom full of unhappy students that are not learning in a way that they understand. This would look like a house full of dead kittens. In fact, kids would learn way better if they were able to pick their own teachers. You might think that kids will take advantage of that authority that they have, but you are wrong. If you give them authority, then they will learn to be responsible because they now that you can trust them, and they will have good teachers that they want! You can have the kids not only learning academics but they will also be learning how to be more responsible too. Not only will the kids be the smartest in Edison, but the school will at the top of the district. Think about it, it’s a win, win. Ways that this can affect the students One of the reasons why the board of education should allow the kids to choose their own teachers are kids are treated with no respect, it is like we are invisible and someone to do everything for them, other kids get authority, what about us? He teacher picking should affect us in a way that teaches us to be more responsible because our parents don’t pay taxes for us to sit around in a building, if the board of education does not do this, parents will complain that we are not getting a good education, this class is to easy, or this class is too hard for him/her. It will have a major decrease in the people who go to Edison schools. Have you you ever wondered what made the difference? Why are kids getting so many atrocious grades? I thought that I would start by comparing the differences in what would happen.

What would happen if kids were able to chose their teachers

Ø Kids would learn in a way that they understand better. Ø They would have more fun in class. Ø And they will have a teacher that they are shy with.

This is why I would like to choose my teachers. Thank you for your time.

From, Omkar Brahmbhatt

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affected people paragraph: the people that were effected from my writing would be the teachers because they will have students that they like not the annoying ones. more people that will get effected would be my parents because then my grade won't be lowering and they won't be that concerned.the last person that will be effected would be me because. i will get better grades, i wont be grounded... as much, and i will get to be in a good college