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Dear Mr. Figueroa,

Just take a couple of minutes to read this. I know you hate staying at work for a long time so here is your chance to make the school days shorter. I think you should cut the school days shorter so you can spend time with your family and friends. I hope this letter convinces you to cut the school days shorter. I think the school days should be shorter so you can spend more time with people you want to see or talk to. You can also have the periods in 25 minutes and passing time 3 minutes. It will be just like a delayed opening but you will go in at the same time. You will be able to have a nice and happy family dinner. It will be so much easier for the teachers to grade test. I think there is a problem. Some of the parents work over time so who would watch the kids. **I KNOW**, maybe we can create a babysitter program at our school that watch the kids that there parents have work for a long time. The babysitters will get paid and the students will play a lot of fun activities. It will be so good for the kids and the staff of the program. If you cut the school days shorter, school will end at 1: 30 the half of    days will end at 12:00. If you let the school days be shorter the students of Herbert Hoover will let to spend more time with there family and friends. If anyone has busy schedules they wont be able to do homework. Also they will be so tired for the next school day. If you cut the school days shorter the staff, teachers, and students will be happier. You should take a day to think about it. You wouldn’t want any of the students upset. Do you? So please reply all of the students want to know including me. So think about it    and reply. Sincerely, your student Nick Peterson :]

QUESTION:

1.HI i need help. In the red paragraph how can i describe it and make it longer?

2.What else could i add to my paragraph or should i make another paragraph? 3.Is there any words i can add or i miss spelled? 4.Can i add anything to my first paragraph?