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 Dear Mom, Have you ever gotten that feeling when you walk into a pet store and you like something you see, but can’t buy it? The reason I say this is because I would like to get a hamster. I promise to take care of it. I know that I have had some problems in the past, but I was young. Give me a break. I didn’t know how to take care of animals, but I’m older now. I have learned how to be responsible and trustworthy. For example, I know that you don’t check my homework, but I don’t stop doing my homework. I still do it. This shows that I’m responsible and trustworthy.

I know that you think that I can’t have a hamster and that I can not be trusted. In order to show you that I can, I will pay for everything. I will take up babysitting Justyn (my cousin) and make some money.Also, I will do more chores and help out around the house. Here are some benefits if i get a hamster.  The benefits of me getting a hamster are: These benefits are great for you and me. I will be able to go to sleep at the correct time because I didn’t sleep before. Also, I know how you like to be alone, and if I get a hamster. I will leave you alone. I know you want that.
 * More you time
 * Justyn learning responsiblity
 * Me learning more about animals
 * Auntie, more time to herself
 * Me, occupied and not bored
 * Doing more chores to support the animal

Mommy if you decide to finally get me a hamster, I will appreciate it very much. I just want something to take care of instead of a human. The cats, I take care of them, but I can not bring them to the house. You also need to know what people are going to be affected by me getting a hamster. The affected people will be you, Justyn, Auntie, and me. Auntie will be affected because she will not be bothered that much because Justyn will be with me. Justyn will be affected because he will learn how to take care of an animal, and be gentle with animals. You will be affected because you have more time to yourself. Last, but not least me. I will be affected because I will have to do more chores to support the hamster. These are the people who will be affected.

Everyone around me has dogs and cats, but I don’t. It is a little weird. I have no pets at the house and it is killing me. I have people come over to the house and there are no pets I have to show them. I go over to other peoples houses and they have pets. I start to feel sad. Well, this is the end of my letter. Everything is up to your decision now. Choose wisely please. I will understand your decision.

Love your daughter, Tianna

Questions:
 * 1) 1~Do you have anymore benefits that I could add in?
 * 2) 2~Do you this was a good ending?
 * 3) 3~ Should I add more?
 * 4) 4~ Do you think my letter was persuasive enough?