Farrah's+Page

Dear Mr.Figeroua,

Did you know junk food makes people obese everyday? Just imagine the amount of people who go to McDonalds and order 5 burgers 3 sodas and 2 large fries just for themselves. Wow that’s a lot of junk food don’t you think so? My name is Farah Haq I am in 6th grade and am here to talk to you about our school cafeteria. You know all the chips and snacks you have in the Hoover cafeteria in the vending machines those are really unhealthy, here are some reasons why you shouldn’t have it there and why people shouldn’t eat it.

- It’s unhealthy and not very good for you.  t has a lot of trans fat inside it.  Fruits are healthier and better for you. Kids will want to eat more of the snacks and won’t finish their lunch properly.  Eating healthy is very important for kids and junk food won’t help them grow stronger.

In fact I am not even saying not to have vending machines all I am saying is to get rid of all the unhealthy stuff and put things like fruits granola bars and those sorts of things. I am saying this because it’s not a bad idea at least I think its not and if it was I wouldn’t have bothered you about something silly. If we eat healthy we will get strong and will not have a tough time during fitness day in gym when we have to run for 20 minutes straight and will be fit. One thing I know is that if I was you I would really give this a thought and reconsider .Thank you for reading this and I hope you get inspired by what I said.

Sincerely, Farah Haq

Questions: 1. Should I add anything to my last paragraph? 2. What do I need to work most on? 3. Do I need to work on anything else? 4. Should I have more bullets?

AFFECTED PEOPLE PARAGRAPH

The people this paragraph might affect is the principle, students , teachers , custodians, janitors, and other people in the faculty. This might effect them because they might have their own opinion and would'nt agree with me. Students could get effected because kids like junk food but health is very important too. This also could effect the teachers because they have snack shacks after school and other things. It would'nt be as bad for the janitor or custodians because they wont have to clean up the left over wrappers and the floor.