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​ Dear Mr. Figueroa,

You know that feeling when you just settled in with a teacher that you really like. Well that’s what I felt with Mr. Lothian. The reason I say this is because I like Mr. Lothian better than Mrs. Schneiderman. Once when I settled in with Mr. Lothian, marking period 1 was over and we gad to switch. I like pie. I have nothing against Mrs. Schneiderman, but I just like Mr. Lothian better. For example Mr. Lothian is funnier, I got better grades in Mr. Lothian’s class. Here are some reasons why I like Mr. Lothian’s class better than Mrs. Scneiderman’s class. hello ppl · Mr. Lothian doesn’t give home work every night. · He doesn’t go crazy when we click are pens more then once. · He doesn’t go crazy when we are chewing gum. He tells us nicely to throw it out. Mrs. Schneiderman gives us a warning. In the morning don’t you want to chew gum to get the bad breath out of your mouth? Well I do and Mrs. Schneiderman says right when we walk in her room we have to throw it out in the garbage. Also every time we click are pens she goes CRAZY!! When we switch teachers it is like we are starting school all over again. We have to learn different rules. Also a different teaching style. If I would ask every body in my class, they would say they want Mr. Lothian back. We call him Mr. Lo lo. If you were kid in our time you would want to have Mr. Lothian instead of Mrs. Schneiderman. Mr. Lothian was the best teacher I ever had in school. So if you could make it so that we have Mr. Lothian back all year. I would love it if you could. Sincerely, Mike Fogarty :-} Questions:

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